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   A hungry young fox once chased after a plump rabbit, intending to catch his dinner. However, just before the fox could capture his prey, the rabbit disappeared into its warren.
   Being young, the fox was unsure of how he might force the rabbit out of hiding, and decided to seek advice. He ran to his mother's den, explained his trouble and listened carefully to her instructions. To be doubly sure, he also visited his grandmother and asked for her opinion. Still worried that he did not know enough, he further enquired of his uncle. Then he lay down and carefully thought through what he had been told.
   At last, feeling confident in his newfound knowledge, he returned to the warren and found that the rabbit had moved on.

Much knowledge cannot replace swift action.
For `fllnthblnk's contest. An attempt at walking the fine line between preachiness and obscurity. Criticism on whether I achieved that in any degree, or on anything else, is more than welcome.

24/6: Added some more detail to the fox's quest for advice, thanks to some good advice given to me.
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KreepingSpawn Dec 6, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
in the finest tradition of Aesop! :clap:
simple form and direct language make this very effective. i like that you do not go into detail of what the fox learned from his elders, as this does not pertain to the thrust of the story. ;)
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:iconpaperdart:
Thanks muchly! Glad you liked it. :)
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:iconarcharad:
Congratulations on a well-deserved 2nd place my dear! :clap:

I agree with `ATrue that a little more detail on who he spoke to and what they said may round out the story a bit more.
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:iconpaperdart:
Thank you. :) I have added a bit in. :nod:
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Newpapers Jun 23, 2010  Student General Artist
congrats on getting second place!
It must've been hard thinking up a fable. :D
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:iconpaperdart:
Thanks! This one was just a case of giving my subconscious a chance. :P There was nothing for a week or two, and then all of a sudden, out of the void, there was something.
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Newpapers Jun 24, 2010  Student General Artist
ahh.....sometime trying hard won't help, but relaxing and thinking about other stuff will,yes? :D
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:iconatrue:
This is excellent in concept. The moral is clear and defined. My only suggestion would be to elaborate on what the fox did and who he spoke to on his hunt for knowledge. The description of his hunt is so short, it really don't feel like he acted less than swiftly. :)
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